Thursday, January 15, 2009

CREATIVE CHALLENGE #36 QUIET IS THE NIGHT

So sorry, my Muse turned up, but was only half here, she attends way to many Muse Parties, Gator's Muse has given my Muse some questionable habits. . .I started the challenge with the wrong phrase (the second poem is the first), so I rewrote it (the first poem is the second)  Hope you enjoy, and this all makes sense. . .

Peaceful Is The Night

Peaceful is the night

in curtained mist

Quiet is the night

mist draping into dew

 

Cold is the night

dew gently settling

over comrades and foes alike

in diamond shrouds

 

Peaceful is the night

 Quiet are the nameless

 friends and foes alike

sleeping under diamond shrouds

 

Nameless is the silence

of friends and foes alike

embraced in eternity

in the Quiet of the night.

 

QUIET IS THE NIGHT

Quiet is the night

in curtained mist

Quiet is the night

mist draping into dew

 

Cold is the night

dew gently settling

 over comrades and foes alike

in diamond shrouds

 

Quiet is the night

Quiet are the nameless

the friends and foes alike

sleeping in diamond shrouds

 

Nameless is the silence

of friends and foes alike

embraced in eternity

Peacful is the night.

 

22 comments:

  1. i feel like i should whisper, as to not disturb the quiet here :) enjoyed

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  2. WOW, awesome writing John, love it! Sshhhhhh lol

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  3. penguin ...your depth never fails to astound me...very nice

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  4. wow... That's powerful stuff!

    -bravo!-

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  5. Beautiful imagery for comrades and foes alike. I like it John, well done.

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  6. Do not think evil ever sleeps Space, but those poor souls caught in circumstances certainly do. . .

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  7. Well done my friend...I've seen you do this in the past and it's been far too long since you've shared your talent with the world.

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  8. Very well done Johnoh..very thought provoking..

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  9. They are both lovely and you don't have to use the exact phrase, it is just for inspiration...I love the image of the dew and also love the phrase, sleeping in diamond shrouds...awesome job John!

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  10. I love the silence....when I am not feeling my best I enjoy the silence of my own my mind.

    Beautiful post!

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  11. I have no words to give this the praise it deserves. I'm speechless. Thoughtfully, respectfully speechless.

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  12. As I was lurking around in the email at work last night.. you already know what I think of this... it is so beautifully written... just wonderful... I told Cherie that it should be published to share with the world...
    Having read a few past works, it is not too surprising! You write so well. As I told you in the email... your words paint the picture and what a beautiful picture it is!

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  13. This reminds me of Tolkien or a fantasy work. It is quite the contrast with the brightness of your blog. Really well done!

    http://qwith.multiply.com/journal/item/40/Creative_Challenge_36

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  14. Beautiful poem, i agree with the rest..:)

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